June Tang
In your blog, I saw your strong interest in your own research topic, as well as your detailed and rigorous investigation process. I was very surprised by the depth of this academic investigation, which deserves recognition. In addition, in the process of publishing the blog, I can clearly see that you are gradually increasing the support of literature, with rich pictures and texts, and detailed information. Let me see the process of gradual improvement and the ability to self-adjustment.
From my point of view, it might be better if these aspects can be improved. First of all, I noticed that most of the content in your blog is about your topic, but when I saw your blog, I didn’t have much idea about how your project would be presented. Most of what I saw was some theoretical and research content. Maybe it’s because it’s still in the early stages of the project. Secondly, I think it might be more focused if you can further narrow the focus of your topic and focus on a specific part of Shenzhen’s urban development.
Overall, I think this is very detailed work!
Lingqiu Xiao
I noticed that all your blogs have very clear logical context and organizational framework, which makes people understand at a glance. I think this is a part that is very worthy of recognition. In addition, your blog covers a wide range of content, such as the selection of artists, funding sources, and many other aspects, rather than just focusing on the topic itself. The comprehensiveness of the blog is also worthy of recognition.
However, there may be some parts that need improvement. For example, in your blog, I seem to see very few thoughts about “why”, for example, why this artist’s work, and how the work is related to your theme. It is undeniable that I have seen your step-by-step research process, but it would be better if you could more clearly reflect on the connection between your research process and the final exhibition plan. In addition, can more academic support be added to the research process? I think your understanding and recording of documentaries and seminars are very helpful, but if you can read more literature, it may make the plan more convincing.
Overall, I thought it was well organized work!
