I. Project Status Analysis

1. Narrative Structure IssuesThe current proposal integrates three overlapping narratives (“Piper Boy Mythology,” “Urban Perspective Shifts,” and “Environmental Themes,” respectively), resulting in content bloat. The advisor emphasizes that a 10-minute experience cannot sustain complex storytelling and recommends focusing on a single core concept.
2. Presentation Deficiencies
   • Mood boards lack concrete visual guidelines (e.g., specific applications of balloons/lighting)
   • Audio samples missing timestamp annotations and creative intent documentation
   • The technical proposal lacks venue layout diagrams and equipment wiring schematics

II. Core Optimization Recommendations

1. Narrative Simplification Options

• Option A: Retain the Piper Boy FrameworkLinear structure: Underground labyrinth → Bird’s-eye perspective → Escape sequence, using urban field recording transformations for perspective shifts
• Option B: Urban Creature PerspectivesPresent Edinburgh’s urban ecology through canine/aquatic/insect auditory perspectives, employing audio modulation techniques to隐喻 human environmental impact

2. Technical Implementation Enhancements

• Audio system: 4-channel spatial configuration (speakers at venue corners)
• Projection vs. screen display solutions requiring finalization
• Interaction streamlining: Remove opening performance and audience path selection, implement environmental audio guidance
• Video content simplification focusing on core concepts and acoustic expression

III. Critical Execution Milestones

1. Prototype Testing
   • Audio modulation experiments with urban field recordings
   • Visual style validation tests
2. Visual Standards Development
   • Color scheme finalization (Pantone 19-4052 Classic Blue proposed)
   • Dynamic visual language specifications

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